Tuesday, April 28, 2020
The Alchemist
The Alchemist
She had resided at Raven Cliff Crag for hundreds of years, perfecting her art, honing her skills.
Her concoctions bubbled and frothed in front of her; she let out a hearty laugh. “Not long now” she muttered under her breath. Her creation was almost complete.
The bottles were seething widely under her glare, finally she could escape her superiors and run away with a new free will
The mountains far beyond seemed to salute her as she lifted her head triumphantly, the little shacks they sleep in seem tiny compared to the world beyond.
She is so close to breaking free of their little spell, time is what is needed now.
Raven cliff crag was unaware of the high treason occuring behind the scenes of their heavily guarded campsite.
For thousands of years she had respected her people, she had watched them die and have others take their places at the top. She has seen new laws be placed and she has obeyed them, no praise. She is just the healer, the witch that can protect us.
No longer will she tolerate it.
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Wow! This is fabulous. Are you going to develop it further or leave it as a moment in time. The opening sentence is really powerful as it hooks the reader in with a sense of anticipation which you build on, using show-not-tell really well.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sharon! I do really want to keep going with the story but I think I need to do a bit more character brainstorming before I write more.
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