we have been learning how to write a six paragraph story in class hope you enjoy
the icy lake
Mr Barr was staring at the frost on the trees is as flakey as a dry apricot. The lake is a frozen carpet waiting to be walked on. The polar bear was a kind critter with loads of friends. The tall trees were as large as a massive building. The icy snow was a blanket on all the plants resting. Mr Barr had a special talent he could communicate to wildlife such as animals and pets. He looked down at the lake he took of his hat he was sad because his CAT WAS MISSING his cat was called polo he was his prized possesion and best buddy how was he supposed to find him TO BE CONTINIUED !!!!!
Mr Barr was staring at the frost on the trees is as flakey as a dry apricot. The lake is a frozen carpet waiting to be walked on. The polar bear was a kind critter with loads of friends. The tall trees were as large as a massive building. The icy snow was a blanket on all the plants resting. Mr Barr had a special talent he could communicate to wildlife such as animals and pets. He looked down at the lake he took of his hat he was sad because his CAT WAS MISSING his cat was called polo he was his prized possesion and best buddy how was he supposed to find him TO BE CONTINIUED !!!!!
good job Tinkerbell next time before you post something make sure that everything makes sense :)
ReplyDeleteI liked how you described the trees and the lake also I like how you named the main character
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you your main character Mr Barr after your own last last name. And here's some advice you don't have to take it but maybe explain things that aren't happening around the main character like you could explain more of the wildlife that was in the snowy forest like maybe squirrels or something. And my question is why was it a cat that was Mr Barr's companion? reply to me if you can tell me why.
ReplyDeletepolo the cat was his best friend because it was the first thing that actully liked him and he loved him so much. and thanks for the advice
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